tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post5705080470471608516..comments2023-10-29T08:58:12.172-04:00Comments on Prone to Whimsy: FFF #36 The VisitJenny Jenny Flanneryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07621715431584059448noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-17213415716865202682010-07-24T15:18:03.779-04:002010-07-24T15:18:03.779-04:00I think I would have crapped myself if my counselo...I think I would have crapped myself if my counselor would have said anything like that to me. What a great piece, and I'm with chad, where's the next chapter?<br /><br />I apologize for my tardiness in getting here to read it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-70017896145430308842010-07-22T11:01:05.699-04:002010-07-22T11:01:05.699-04:00next chapter?next chapter?chad rohrbacherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02108600205697375432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-19740697222316663362010-07-21T14:06:29.045-04:002010-07-21T14:06:29.045-04:00This was weird and wonderful, in the very best sen...This was weird and wonderful, in the very best sense of both those words! I like the part where Marina wonders who's the patient - her or the therapist!<br /><br />But it stopped too soon - what happens next.....?SueHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11394307650434614637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-89206415790237311642010-07-20T16:47:14.453-04:002010-07-20T16:47:14.453-04:00Very cool. I knew therapists had a secret agenda....Very cool. I <i>knew</i> therapists had a secret agenda.ERRhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16442208638023629048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-67124280073881394082010-07-20T14:56:51.816-04:002010-07-20T14:56:51.816-04:00Excellent tale. Glad my sentence could inspire yo...Excellent tale. Glad my sentence could inspire you.WellesFanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16063771443019228190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-46858241292886758272010-07-20T14:46:02.709-04:002010-07-20T14:46:02.709-04:00The other gents have pointed out what I was thinki...The other gents have pointed out what I was thinking, but - to reiterate: the dialogue and phrasing in this piece were excellent.Crybbe666https://www.blogger.com/profile/14752123812270914073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-65977795247946446272010-07-20T14:11:53.293-04:002010-07-20T14:11:53.293-04:00This chick is gonna end up working for the CIA as ...This chick is gonna end up working for the CIA as a psychic assassin, isn't she.Randal Graveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08728992897551848531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-6869665293092458272010-07-20T13:41:36.828-04:002010-07-20T13:41:36.828-04:00And how long did it take?
Ancient Chinese secret...And how long did it take? <br /><br />Ancient Chinese secret...Jenny Jenny Flanneryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07621715431584059448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-75008902304753818432010-07-20T13:30:38.603-04:002010-07-20T13:30:38.603-04:00Barbara: Very cool! And me neither! The end reveal...Barbara: Very cool! And me neither! The end revealed itself to me as I wrote...Thanks!<br /><br />MRMacrum: Thank you! I love writing dialog. I'm gald it worked and sorry it ended so soon. <br /><br />Doc: Thanks for the kind words! I had a really tough editor once and I learned to do my own editing so I wouldn't have to suffer through that anymore. <br /><br />I leave off the excess because I want to serve the reader...I don't want to take them somewhere they don't need to go just because it amuses me. <br /><br />Thanks everyone!Jenny Jenny Flanneryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07621715431584059448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-22686531285441281602010-07-20T12:45:37.282-04:002010-07-20T12:45:37.282-04:00Spiritual awakenings, how wonderful! I hope that t...Spiritual awakenings, how wonderful! I hope that this is from something that is happening in your own life. My therapist just wants to spend forty-five minutes of my hour time slot telling me about all of the goofy things Mel Gibson has been up to because he wouldn't take his meds.<br /><br />I had to stop and look up what a "mandala" was, but then I don't get out much. I thought you meant Nelson Mandela. I couldn't picture a multicolored one of him but I was willing to go with you on that one just to find out where the story was going to end up.<br /><br />One of the things that I love about your stories is that they are consistantly succinct and your wonderful use of language shines through each and every one. In your stories, there is never any fluff or padding for it's own sake. You never meander away from the story to shove in some clever line or some backstory that the reader doesn't really need. They are like a Tom T. Hall song, and I mean that as the highest praise. The story moves like the melody and your words provide the beat. You truely are your own best editor, a gift I envy heartily. You really have a gift for this and I'm tickled to no end that you are finally flexing your writing muscles and sharing your talent. I know I've learned a lot about constructing a stort story from reading yours. I often want to write eight pages, when two would have been plenty and would have made it a much better story that way.<br /><br />How long did it take you to bang this out this morning, as inquiring minds want to know?<br /><br />All my love,<br />DocDochttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16979621370660001312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-62247395110019817302010-07-20T12:44:23.692-04:002010-07-20T12:44:23.692-04:00Great dialog. It's always a good sign when I ...Great dialog. It's always a good sign when I am disappointed the tale ended. Very nice.MRMacrumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01414173517957120477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-11137597165692686362010-07-20T11:59:00.561-04:002010-07-20T11:59:00.561-04:00Fascinating! I did not see this coming.Fascinating! I did not see this coming.Barbara Bruederlinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14476249934930666695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-85105521832531839392010-07-20T10:33:38.748-04:002010-07-20T10:33:38.748-04:00Thank you! I didn't realize I was writing in a...Thank you! I didn't realize I was writing in a genre...which one would you categorize this in that turns you off so?Jenny Jenny Flanneryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07621715431584059448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-11315807.post-54343664247715295182010-07-20T10:04:58.798-04:002010-07-20T10:04:58.798-04:00Excellent (and you got me to read a genre I normal...Excellent (and you got me to read a genre I normally would've given up on, about four paragraphs in).Cormac Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02990698766444728760noreply@blogger.com